Bishop

But, shockingly, I’ve never even broken a bone. if you want to decrease some of the many comma's you have, just try switching the sentence around, like this. `But i've ...

When they awoke, it would be to feel incredibly charged, revived and in most cases the horror of the offenses they’d committed would be nothing them then a dream easily ...

First off, great theme, not making wizardry look so serious all the time, but there were a few mistakes that should be pointed out, because many people make them but ...

I can tell where the story is going, the detective will probably become the hunted, but thats just what makes it action/adventure. You did keep me hooked, on a stable ...

You did keep me a bit confused as to why you kept giving us weird analogies to peice up certain spots of your chapter one, but it wasn't like I ...

Well it really did take me a while to get through it, but it wasn't like I wasn't truly hooked onto it after I got a little further down. I ...