BigBadBear

Thanks, Ginger! Yeah, I agree that the structure is a bit off... I'll play with the words tonight and see what I can do. Thanks! Any more comments or suggestions ...

Haha! I didn't even realize the Harry Potter connection there with the names! I'm glad that you caught that! I guess I'll go and change Granger to something else... Hm... ...

Oh... This really happened? Wow. I didn't know that. Well, I'm sorry. I thought this was fiction... -Jared

Nope. I just looked it up on and it says that 'towards' isn't a word. See? -Jared I critiqued this on POP, remember?

Awesome!!! *goes to read* Have you got a tissue?” Maude made a noise that sounded like a cat throwing up a hair ball. “I feel sick.” She wiped her noise ...

OH! I get it now! Hahahahah! -Jared

Um... I don't get it... -Jared

Hey! I've come back to read more! Hey, that was a pretty good chapter! It was very catchy and fun to read! I wonder what is going to happen next? ...

Thanks Alainna! When you mean repetition, do you mean: Gliding gracefully, ever so gracefully, I twirl and tumble and soar. I am lissome, I am limber, as I tango across ...

Hehe. Thanks Wozzel. Although, I don't understand why you think it's funny. I didn't write it to be funny... Anyway, thanks! Use of the word "lissome": 99786230709846 to the power ...

How do you come up with these brilliant ideas? The actions, the verbs, magnificent! You'll be the next J.K. Rolling! -Jared

Argh! This is sooo terribly long! Maybe that's why no one has bothered to critique this... If you split this into parts more people will read this. Right now, the ...

:shock: I don't know why people like this poem so much. It's rather crappily written. I whipped it together in like five minutes.... Whatever, though! BBB

Oh boy. This is the most stupid poem I've ever written. I wrote it when I [thought] I was in love. So... yeah. This isn't very great. Ignore it! BBB

Hey, thanks for all of the critiques! About the italics: I took them away and replaced them with Capitals. So, now instead of, " He snarled.", it will be, "He ...