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Re: Offended People Offend Me!!!
Before you say anything else, read this . -Jared
Dec 13, 2011 -
Re: My Son is Gay
I would appreciate it if we could keep these comments about my piece, please. I realize that this is a controversial topic, but this isn't the place to voice everyone's ...
Dec 8, 2011 -
Re: My Son is Gay
Thank you guys so much. Some of you have stated that you felt you knew where the story was going from the beginning. If you had read this without seeing ...
Dec 7, 2011 -
Re: My Son is Gay
Thank you all so much for the feedback. ahhsmusch, your comment made me laugh because your advice for the father is EXACTLY what I want this story to be. This ...
Dec 5, 2011 -
Re: Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets (Twitterized)
That was really funny. Nothing more to critique, because I know it's not totally serious. But still. It was funny. You should do this with all of the books! -Jared
Jul 27, 2011 -
Re: Pianissimo [1]
Thanks for the critiques, guys! Part two is posted! Scroll up to the top of the post and click "Click to see possibly related posts". It'll be there. -Jared
Mar 25, 2010 -
Re: John Steinbeck's "Of Mice & Men"
I read this book over the summer after I saw the heart-wrenching movie. I loved it. It's very short--only about 119 pages--and it's really great. I'd also recommend it to ...
Mar 13, 2010 -
Re: e minor
the piano snakes through my fingers I DO NOT like the use of the word "snake" here. It nearly ruined the poem for me. Even if your exercising your poetic ...
Nov 10, 2009 -
Re: Worst Book You've Ever Read
Slaughterhouse 5. -Jared
Jul 23, 2009 -
Re: House of Leaves
Self-centered horndog would be an apt description. XD Exactly. What was your favorite part of the novel? -Jared
Apr 18, 2009 -
Re: The Tale of Edgar Pastor 1.1
For some reason, I was under the impression that this was going to be a piece set in past, circa 1890-1900. I'm not sure why I thought that; probably because ...
Mar 15, 2009 -
Re: Maybe Skies Are Blue
Holly, You have a very strong poem here, but the main problem with this is that the change from Stanza 2 to Stanza 3 is much too abrupt. You go ...
Mar 10, 2009 -
Re: YWS Bill of Rights
Well said. This should be a sticky in the Welcome forum, or the Information Desk. -Jared
Mar 3, 2009 -
Re: World of War Part I
Thankyou soooo much. You see, i had to write a short story for my english class.and i told my friends if i get an "a" on it i will finish ...
Mar 1, 2009 -
Re: Paradise Island (1)
Thanks, Cat! I made those changes. I'll probably be posting some more tomorrow. I just need to edit the second portion up a bit. Thanks! Your comments are much appreciated. ...
Jan 20, 2009