BigBadBear

Hya Jabs! What's up? Diving into poetry is really scary. Especially with Brad lurking around... ;) To write a poem , oh-so grand. May I suggest a comma tonight? This ...

Hya Wozzel! What's up? Daniel gave me a puzzled stare. “Why would you look under my bed for something in my closet?” HAhahah! It was then that I knew that ...

Told you I'd be the first to crit! And shhh! I'm not supposed to be on YWS for another week! ]Her red curls fell in her face, trying to protect ...

Hya, Jabber! I loved the prologue, and I just had to come and read chapter 1! ------- Just a suggestion >> use contractions. They make everything a little easier to ...

Oh, Jabber, you are soooo awesome! thanks for posting this! I knew who was giving them to me, but the fact that Mabel made Sara give them away made me ...

Oh, wow, Jabber. You said I would be crying because of how bad it was. Well, I feel like crying because I wish I could meet the soon-to-be famous author! ...

Hey, Wozzel! What's up? This was a pretty good song - although, I'm not very good a critting, it seems like everything that you do is worth one of my ...

Hey, Razor! What's up? You deserve some critiques after all that you've done for us! So, here I go! Ooh! Tis WW2! My favorite war ever! Thank you for writing ...

Hey, Saves! What's up? I haven't seen you around YWS before, so I'll introduce myself. I'm Jared. How are you? ** Note : This would get more critiques if you ...

Hi, Alleycat. How are you today? Hope you're doing good... The First Poem A bead of dew upon a single leaf Holds all the waking world within its sphere. A ...

Again, wow! Cat-sama, this is really good. I'm talking with you on MSN right now and you said it's not supposed to make sense. Well, I have no clue what ...

:shock: Wow. :shock: Well, Cat-sama, this was very interesting. To make it short, I loved it!!! You can't really improve on this, I thinks. Let me go back and see... ...

Hey, Yoyo! What's up? I decided to do a critting spree: do as many crits as I can before I go to bed. Hopefully I'll have some points! All right, ...

Hey! I see that you are new here, so welcome to YWS! I'm Jared, or BBB, whatever. Since your new, have you happened to look at the rules? It's a ...

Hey, Razor! Well, I gotta tell you that this was pretty interesting. I'll definately read more. I agree with Suz, though. The first sentence is a real put-downer. I usually ...