BigBadBear

Hey. Don't let everyone tell you it sucks, because you said that it was a concrete poem. Go back and edit this. Delete the entire thing and re-copy and paste ...

O.o you have another one? Let's take a look! “A miniscule trace of the Adamses bloodline may be circulating through thy veins but ye are not pure of blood. Therefore, ...

XP Had to click on it because of the title! [s]Then,[/s] he rubbed some residue that was dripping from his bottom lip. Paul Revere is drooling. You changed tenses here. ...

I'm not in the best of moods, so sorry if I come across a bit harsh. It was good, but nothing spectacular that would want to make me read it ...

Hey, Cal! Well, I read your other poem, and I didn't think that I liked it all that much. It was nothing really amazing about it. It didn't stick out ...

Hey! This was a very good poem, and I can't offer any critiques but It has cool line breaks, but I can't get them to show up You might want ...

Cat-sama! I'm so glad that you posted something ! What, do you only post one thing every couple of months? ;) How could something be so breathtakingly beautiful, and yet ...

Haha. Wow. This was terribly good. I love your MC, she's very spazzy. I like her like that! And the cliche part of it really makes it awesome. There isn't ...

Duuuude. You barely have any critiques! Why? It was way awesome. There is only one thing that I think you are missing. But I'll get to that in a sec. ...

[s]Haha, dude, you should have told me this was out! I just got home, so when I'm ready, I'll come back and edit this and write a crit. -Jared be ...

Okay, just let me say that I LOVE this poem! It was such an amazing thing to read! I love the switch between the stanzas. And the capitalization on only ...

Ooh! That was a wonderful poem! I especially liked the last two lines. Okay, welcome to YWS, by the way. Okay, now you heaven and hell defintions were very good. ...

Wow. That was really beautiful. I really loved all of the metaphors that you used in this... it's just beautiful. There was only one grammatical error. and I breathe heavy. ...

Awwwh. Why doesn't this have any critiques? I'll change that. :o You looked mad. Could you find another word than 'mad'? It's so plain! This is where you can add ...

Hey, tRiCk! What's up? Welcome to YWS, by the way. Ok, this is common in newbies (hehe) but be sure to put a space between each paragraphs, like I am ...