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Hello, Fiction, looks like I'll be your first reviewer. I'm very nitpicky and I go very in depth and I will tear apart your writing at the sentence level. I ...

Hello, BerlynnRae. I'll be your reviewer for today. Be warned that I can get very nitpicky and in-depth; sometimes I end up writing paragraphs for a single sentence. So yeah, ...

Hello, brassnbridle, I will be your reviewer today. I tend to go very in depth and I can write paragraphs about a single sentence. Hope that doesn't put you off. ...

Okay, so, here's your review as requested. Warning--I go very in depth and I can spend paragraphs dissecting a single sentence. Also, please forgive any oddness in spacing; I had ...

Okay, I'll admit that I didn't read it. And I'm still going to review. Now why would I do that? It's obviously not polite. Thing is, I think very few ...

Try the Left Behind Series by Tim LeHaye and Jerry Jenkins Or the awesome continuing analysis of those books on the Slacktivist blog. I've been following those for a while ...

Hi Amaryllis, here I am again! ^^ I really like this first chapter--it combines worldbuilding, character development, and plot seamlessly. Which is quite hard to do, so good job there. ...

Hi Amaryllis, I'll be your reviewer for today. ^^ I really like the world you've set up here; the lack of food and Lauren's worrying over it reminds me almost ...

Hi Lynnea, I'll be your reviewer for today. It's getting rather late so I'm not going to be terribly lucid and I'll keep this brief. Please excuse any spelling/grammar errors. ...

Hi crescent, I'll be your reviewer for today. I'll mostly be covering the "big issues"--namely, characterization, plot, and worldbuilding--insteadof nitpicking on grammar, since you already have a pre

Holy paragraphs, Batman... The first thing I'd suggest you do is make those paragraphs shorter. It'll make your work much less intimidating to read through, and you'd get more reviews. ...

Hi, blackpencil, I'll be your reveiewer for today. I quite like this. Your descriptions are beautiful and evocative--I especially love the bits of personification you have: the river hurrying, the ...

A very cute story. ^^ I have to say that I was confused at first exactly how old Jack was. Like Rosey said, I don't think that a little kid ...

Hi, OnyxFire, I'll be your reviewer for today. ^^ The first thing I have to ask: is this prologue really necessary? All of this information and backstory seems like it ...

Just a little pointer, but it tends to be easier on the reviewers if you post each chapter in its own thread, insead of constantly updating the same one. I'm ...