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Like I said, line by line. :D I may not get through all this today, though--understand I'm rather busy (and need to get cracking on studying for the P-sat). So...here ...

This is well-written, and I didn't notice any major grammar/spelling errors, but... You're right; this is basically an info-dump. While I understand it's necessary to introduce these characters, is it

Er, first of all--you are aware there's a rule on this site that you need to critique two works before you post your own work? If you do that, there's ...

Well. Um...first of all... I honestly do not mean to be harsh, but to be frank, I don't think this would work very well as a novel. Really, I don't ...

It was a cold night in the middle of the winter and it started to snow slowly with big snow flakes that covered the village in a blanket of coldness ...

Very, very interesting concept you've got here--the world you've painted is believable and intriguing, and I for one can't wait to see more. I love your characterization of Ryan (he's ...

Yes! :D Another one! And, as always, well-written--I really, really , enjoyed this, and I think it's the strongest piece yet (at least of the few I've read so far...) ...

As if by design, the storm that pounded on the car roof, creating a steel mesh in the head lights, washing the highway in oily black, and the conversation inside ...

Sorry for taking so long to critique--I was working on Zenith! I can't believe it but I've got my fire for the project back. Amaz-azing. (I think you--and all who ...

Alsana was shocked by the news. Well...this is a major example of telling instead of showing. It's not a good sign when the very first sentence of your epic fantasy ...

Yes! Finally! Sorry, I shouldn't be too eager, should I...? >_> But really, I was looking forward to this A LOT. All I can say is--excellent job. I can really ...

Whoo hoo, let's see~! This time, I know Riley's a girl. And I do apologize for my faux must wound the writer deeply when a reader mistakes the gender of ...

Yaaay! More Mutts stuff--and about the robotic police officers, too! Let's see-- The AI unit lay still on the examination table. It was still and silent in sleep mode. You ...

Wow, the newspaper format is truly interesting; I think you captured much of the feel of a real newspaper quite well. The idea described is rather old and somewhat worn ...

Wow...that was just...fascinating. I haven't read the other stories in this series (100? Wow, that's ambitious; I wish I had that sort of dedication) but this has definitely piqued my ...