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Here I go. it was morning. I'd say "it" should be capitalized but more than that, I think this first sentence should be scrapped completely. You never, NEVER want to ...

Okay, here I go~! Sister Margeret brought out an old looking book from beneath her cloak and handed it over to Sister Innet. You don't need the "old looking" there...just ...

Sorry for the late review. My life got consumed by studying and so on...:( But I'm here now! So... First of all--awesome ending. You really seem to be building up ...

La la~! I felt guilty about not reviewing any of your stuff after you've given so many helpful reviews to Zenith, so...here I am! Great story, I loved it. Which ...

Like I said, line by line. :D I may not get through all this today, though--understand I'm rather busy (and need to get cracking on studying for the P-sat). So...here ...

This is well-written, and I didn't notice any major grammar/spelling errors, but... You're right; this is basically an info-dump. While I understand it's necessary to introduce these characters, is it

Er, first of all--you are aware there's a rule on this site that you need to critique two works before you post your own work? If you do that, there's ...

Well. Um...first of all... I honestly do not mean to be harsh, but to be frank, I don't think this would work very well as a novel. Really, I don't ...

It was a cold night in the middle of the winter and it started to snow slowly with big snow flakes that covered the village in a blanket of coldness ...

Very, very interesting concept you've got here--the world you've painted is believable and intriguing, and I for one can't wait to see more. I love your characterization of Ryan (he's ...

Yes! :D Another one! And, as always, well-written--I really, really , enjoyed this, and I think it's the strongest piece yet (at least of the few I've read so far...) ...

As if by design, the storm that pounded on the car roof, creating a steel mesh in the head lights, washing the highway in oily black, and the conversation inside ...

Sorry for taking so long to critique--I was working on Zenith! I can't believe it but I've got my fire for the project back. Amaz-azing. (I think you--and all who ...

Alsana was shocked by the news. Well...this is a major example of telling instead of showing. It's not a good sign when the very first sentence of your epic fantasy ...

Yes! Finally! Sorry, I shouldn't be too eager, should I...? >_> But really, I was looking forward to this A LOT. All I can say is--excellent job. I can really ...