BellaRoma

New, improved... Part 5 is ready.

Character development is HARD. I think it always comes across as subtle but it must be obvious enough for the reader. Sometimes I guess it happens automatically. I've tried to ...

Seriously, I can imagine that Ben will be devastated,

Asteria must be SO drunk because she's just like "give me the vodka" after she said what happened. But... I sorta understand, I don't know why. It might be that ...

Is that a hint? I wonder... I suspect Juno will tell Ben (very dramatically?) I cannot even imagine his reaction! Like I said, the next part will be EPIC!

Okay, so Mercy's POV, following from the events of Part 4. There may be a tiny bit of confusion with tenses but I'm fairly sure it's just the way Mercy ...

Thank you. I can understand if you don't want to review the later but please read them because I have been picking up tips along the way and I think ...

Never mind. I unpublished it. Not quite ready yet. Sorry.

Part 5 is go. A little shorter than normal but it should still work.

I put a non-italic section between the flashbacks 'something did come to mind' and that section was back in the present day. Like I say it gets better.

The image is not quite how I pictured him from the bio. Well done for finding one that fits though, I can see why you picked it now. I spent ...

The image is not quite how I pictured him from the bio. Well done for finding one that fits though, I can see why you picked it now. I spent ...

I have to admit though, it does add to the character nicely. Some characters are designed to be hated. Beauregard is just plain weird, they all are. It just makes ...

I've been cobbling together some character profiles on my blog.

Hopefully... I've assembled some character profiles on my blog if you're interested.