Bando100

Here goes my review. I think this story has a nice foundation (besides the fact that she gets cancer by a building.) There needs to be a lot more detail. ...

This poem leaves me wondering if this poem is even a poem. It sounds like it is more an introduction for a short story. I'm not saying you shouldn't write ...

The thing I like most about your story is the symbolism in it. the orphan symbol is a spot on description of death and the way you wrote it was ...

The dark themes in this story really set the setting for the rest of the story like when it says, It loomed over the crowd, black as night with coal ...