Baileyboo:)

messed up on the 4th line, the two points should be switched.

That was good, and it was quite funny at the end. You should write more funny poetry. I -as well as many others I'm sure- would enjoy that alot. Keep ...

I was actually just thinking about the "yet only few succeed" line before i logged on and well, it's kinda stupid and out of place. I'm going to rewrite this ...

Wow kira, i never knew you were a writer. This is really good. So glad that you joined us!! :D