Baezel

See, now you've left me with the difficult task of reviewing something which, on the first read-through, seems pretty damn perfect. The only thing which I would change is removing ...

Usually in multi-chapter pieces I like to try read all of them before reviewing, so I get an overall picture. However, I'm sorry, because its late and I'm tired, I've ...

I'm a sucker for these fantasy novels set in sad cities. I'm not sure if there's a label for them, but its that specific genre after the middle ages, but ...

(perhaps not helpful, but your deity straight up sounds amazing. I'm curious, what inspired the name? And could you tell me anything more about him?) So when it comes to ...

Okay! I skim read your other chapters, but didn't comment on them. I'll probably touch on them in this review when I talk about the world building and such, but ...

I'll cover this a chapter at a time. Cause you've written so much, I'll try keep it succinct. 1) You character comes across strongly, definitely an arrogant asshole, so I ...

Hey, this is curious. In the true nature of first chapters, you've left us with a lot of questions- something to make us want to keep reading. I think you ...

First off: "worst sci-fi story of all time" my ass. Besides the whole have-confidence-in-yourself attitude, this is actually good? I was smiling the entire time I read it, largely because ...

Hello! Firstly, damn pal, this is good. Are you going to write more, if not about Ilal specifically, then about this world as a whole? I don't really have enough ...

Hello! First of all, yes, this is good. The first line was fascinating, and pulled me in immediately. Your description hit the bulls-eye when you didn't just, you know, describe ...

Well firstly, this was a suspenseful as heck. You've managed to keep it vague enough to keep us wondering, but since we know what's running through your character's head, we ...

I love the writing in this. The second POV works really well, and you've managed to create an eerie tone throughout it. My only wonder is that is this what ...

Ooh! was my immediate reaction. The intro was just down my street, and I'm not going to lie to you, I'm kinda sad the story wasn't about those mysterious folks. ...

Okay so firstly, this is beautiful. Just, right off the bat, ten out of ten, I'm waiting for you to get published, this is wonderfully weird and perfectly poetic and ...

Well, isn't this an interesting concept? But first, the criticism. All in all, it's very good, but there are a few points I think I should mention. For one, I ...