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I like it. A good length, a powerful emotion, and big questions. Definitely a good start. I see you Through foggy glass, This window that seperates us, My hand upon ...

Hey there! Nice job with a really tricky form! I really like the way this poem evokes the feeling of spinning in leaves, of swirling colors and ideas. I was ...

I like it! I especially love the eyes red from crying image--really creative. I agree with the above comments about punctuation. Absolutely necessary. One thing I wasn't wild about was ...

Awesome idea! The writing wasn't bad, either, though I agree with what the two exceptionally thorough reviewers above had to suggest. :wink: My biggest problems were with the dialogue--Cervi sounds ...

A pantoum! How exciting! :D Kudos just for that. As for the poem apart from its form, I'm not sure I quite catch the meaning. I like the sound of ...

Wow. I love the song, one of my favorites, but in some ways this was even more poignant than that haunting melody. Beautiful, just beautiful. I really liked how real ...

I think places are some of the hardest things to describe because they're made up of thousands of interactions between people and people, people and their environment, and people and ...

Hmm. Well, I think it's a good premise for a world, a nice overview of the Beginning. It's certainly direct and clear in establishing the basic history. The writing wasn't ...

I really, really like this. The imagery is great, and I love the initial play off Shakespeare. My favorite lines parts are bruised clouds blanch white and fly away like ...

Hi, and welcome! First off, I really like this poem. I was daydreaming about something like this just this morning, as I walked along concrete pavements in the misty drizzle, ...

Please try to submit two reviews for every piece of yours that you submit; see the rules. Then I'd be happy to review this. Thanks! And welcome to YWS! :D ...

Hey LOSO! Welcome to YWS! :D Some tips before I begin my review: --> Try to get your review count up a bit. At a minimum you should have a ...

Hi! This wasn't terrible, for starters. In fact, it would even be 'pretty good' if I hadn't read essentially the same poem every day for the last two weeks. And ...

I like this, for all its cliches. That's its main problem though--it's waaay too cliche for most people to give it a second chance. The words flow beautifully, the imagery ...

Hey, TSun! Maybe this is forbidden or unethical, but I'm sure a mod will correct me if it is... You're supposed to review at least two works before you post ...