BEASTtheHUN

Thanks for the review. If it wasn't for you, I probably wouldn't have written this, but again, thanks for the review.

Joktar was actually the first son, not the second. Thank you a lot for the review though, glad you enjoyed it!

Yeah, no prob.

I actually was going to do a flashback of the Great deceiver. It would have made a lot more sense, but I was really struggling with it, maybe I will. ...

Thank you so much Mailice, I know I definitely need to work on my grammar. The name is pronounced Kliec-tos with a long e. I am glad that you go ...

I love this story, the pacing is just right. The flow is definitely taking me where you as a writer want me to be. The dialogue was very good, and ...

I loved this story so far, the ideas and plot seem to come together seamlessly. One thing I would say is that the dialogue seems just a wee bit choppy. ...