Azila

Camille, my dear, you are truly a miracle! That's so darn sweet of you, to go and review EVERYTHING in my portfolio! Don't worry, I'll be getting you back one ...

Thanks so much, Camille! Your critique was very helpful (as always) --brutal, but not mean. You should train some of these people on YWS. :roll: I will definitely be taking ...

Yes, I think our styles are similar... I guess our techniques are too. :wink: Oh, and this is random, but what contest? A YWS contest? Also random - I followed ...

Thanks Camille (I didn't know that was your name!)! Your review was really helpful -- encouraging and scrutinizing at the same time. However, I think I have mentioned that I ...

Thanks so much canis! The part with the metal gadget it important, actually (the gadget being a laser pointer) and the sudden mood change in the end is supposed to ...

Thanks, Fangala! Yeah, I've seen Whisper Of The Heart. I think I've seen all of Miyazaki's stuff actually... Wow! that's expensive for a stuffed animal! ~Azila~

Okay... Like I think I said, I'm entering this into a contest. Well I just looked at the website for the contest (The Blue Pencil from Walnut Hill, if anyone's ...

That's ok! I'm glad it can be read more than one way. :wink: And yes, I'm a Miyazaki fan... not all anime, just Miyazaki. :D Thanks for the review my ...

Oh, I'm sorry. Yes, still, frozen, is fine --my mistake, I was misunderstanding your meaning there. The contest was for exactly 100 words, none repeated... Mm... tough! Well, I think ...

Thanks for the review, Pawprint... it was encouraging, but sadly it wasn't brutal. Anyone gonna give me a brutal review? PLEASE? ~Azila~

Thank you so much for reviewing this! It's actually supposed to be a cat, not a dog, but looking back I guess it can be uninterpreted either way. Thanks again! ...

Thanks for the advise, Chimpy. I kinda like the idea of making the sentences reflect the storm itself... but I also like the formatting as it is. :twisted: I will ...

I'm going to be entering this into a competition by the 1st of January. Please be brutal, I can take it. :wink: ~Azila~

Yeah, I'll PM someone who can move this to the Poetry Forums... It will be much happier there. ~Azila~

EDITED! Please let me know what you think. I tried to work a bit of smell and touch into it in that second big paragraph... hopefully it's somewhat improved. ~Azila~ ...