Azila

Wow! I must say, gadi, that my esteem of your writing capability (already exceedingly high) sky-rocketed after reading this. It is SO funny! My gosh, I think I'll have to ...

I really liked it. A lot of the wording is very ...well... wordy :D In a good way; not so much that you didn't get your point across, but enough ...

Hi! It's pretty good. It's not your best, as (in my opinion anyway) it doesn't really say much, but it's well written. Parts of it were confusing, like weather the ...

I really like this piece. I like how you wrote it (second person makes anything seem new and different... and personal) and what it is about --the mother going insane. ...

Madame Kool (as I have noticed you call yourself), I really liked this! I loved that transition Dreamer pointed out, and the whole concept is really original. That said... I ...

I really liked this piece. It was a very fresh way of writing about a topic that a lot of people write about. I noticed a few things that I ...

Hi! I've never critiqued poetry, so bear with me here. :lol: I really liked this poem; the imagery (as people have said) is beautiful. I'm just not sure about how ...

It's pretty good. I found the ending a little strange and not in keeping with the rest of the piece. It's well-written, but the plot is just sort of random. ...

Hi! I didn't know you posted this! Remember, you were supposed to PM me when you posted anything? *ehem* Anyway, down to business. This piece kind of seems like a ...

I liked it a lot. It was short, but sweet. I like the description of the cemetery and you seem to captured the main charactor's slightly frazzled (I love that ...

I really enjoyed reading this. I love how you're summing up a writer's world and looking at it from the outside in... so to speak. :D I just have one ...

I really liked this piece. Not too wordy, not too soppy, yet well-phrased and emotional. I have just one suggestion. No one that dies of tragically delegated misfortune, ever chooses ...

Hi! I liked it a lot. I know how Zack feels, and I like how you told it from someone else's point of view. That was really unexpected and I ...

I agree with Skool15. It goes really fast. A little more detail would make it read better. Try adding more setting description. And the sighting of the deer should really ...

OK. This is pretty good. I like the characters-- you present them all very well and they are all very realistic. The only thing is that I don't really relate ...