AwkwardMeerkat

Hello there, came in for a quick review. Something I just want to say about formatting dialogue is every time a character speaks it's a new paragraph. If you stop ...

Hanzo? You a big overwatch fan? anyway back to the actual review. There is a really sudden weird change in mood and tone when Mina talks about Hanzo in the ...

Alright, I'm back. I don't think you're using the work relented correctly. If she read to the girl, then relented wouldn't be the right word, You could say "I protested ...

Yo! So, I like your description, it's cool but it goes on for a very long time. The description is good but I would sprinkle some other things in there ...

Hey, back again, I really think you should work on describing characters and settings. The character description is kind of awkward where it is, and you don't describe much about ...

The way everyone is just so completely chill with aliens and ghosts and fairies is easily one of the funniest parts of the story. Anyway, this is a review so ...

Heyo! Alright, let's start this review off with a bang. You should try to find a more natural way to blend in how a character looks. Try to limit things ...

Okay, so I have many things to say about this. The mother seems oddly unconcerned with her daughter hurting herself. It's kind of awkward and just really... out of touch. ...

Take most of this with a grain of salt, especially the first paragraph. The second one consider more but the first one is more something to think about you continue ...

This story is extremely vague, is it supposed to be? Was there something I was supposed to read beforehand? I don't know these characters, I have no connection, It's like ...

I think your story has a lot of potential. It's a really cool concept, but there are some things you can improve on. You should avoid describing characters as regular, ...

This story seems to have a lot of filler words, consider editing them out. Another thing is you should consider taking out lines like the last one. They feel cliche ...

I love the article, it does a great job mixing both personal anecdotes and fact. Making the article as a whole much stronger. Something to remember is, try not to ...