Attolia

Sorry, I don't feel like going back to find and read the first four chapters, so I don't know how it ties into the rest of the story or anything. ...

Huh. Why does he have to wait till midnight, and if he wants to hurt her, why does he attempt to do it in such an unreliable way? But don't ...

Hey, I'm Attolia. So I'm not sure how I feel about the first part, starting off with the three types of Christmases, though I do really like your style. And ...

Wow, Navita. No wonder you won the contest. You've given me enough amazing reviews that it's only time I attempt to return the favor. If I ever get anything published, ...

Hey! Great continuation with the story. But she had a heart shaped face, the minute you saw them you couldn't be mistaken. I think you mean "it" instead of "them"? ...

Canislupis did a great job covering all the nitpicks in her review, so I'm just going to tell you the stuff that I don't like. The people passing in the ...

I'm am so with you on loving the ocean. I have basically grown up in the ocean and the water as well. :) This was a good piece. You can ...

Heyy. Sorry it's taken me so long to get to this. Anyway, I really like your writing. This first thing I noticed about this story was that the MC's name ...

Hey. Canislupis gave you an awesome review, and I agree with all she said. I have a few comments to add though. I closed my eyes. This was it. I ...

First time I've ever reviewed a poem. (Partly because I can understand what you're saying here, so good job on that, but this also probably won't be much of a ...

I like this so far. I'm going to review both 0.04 and 0.05 here. 0.04: I really like this part. It's got some intense phrases. But I agree with Tenyo ...

Hey. I thought this was a very good, interesting story. It definitely kept me reading. I really liked the style of exposition you chose too - the two kids talking, ...

This is brilliant :). I love the tone in it. All I could find were nitpicks. she wanted it, no needed it. maybe instead she wanted it - no, needed ...

Hey. Good continuation with the story so far. They gleam a deep brown, matching my eyes. I don't like this analogy. Comparing her eyes to airplane seats? You don't need ...

Haha, I liked this! Forgetting your the mention of zombies, I thought it was going to be another cliched suicide/depression story from the first two paragraphs. And then bam! It ...