AspiringAuthorA..M.

Another version huh? Will take a look at it tomorrow. :P

I was working off of a video that I saw on youtube. :D The police in civilian clothing simply appeared from the right side of the cameras view. But, I ...

Edited to the two pints of the poster above. :P

I thought I only posted enormous stories. :lol:

Yeah, you have two reviews. Upon careful observation however, you will see that they are precise mirror images of each other. :lol:

You hardly ever get reviews or comments. That's just not fair! My randomly creative writings that I put together in no time get so many reviews it's flattering. And yet, ...

Another character named Deus? :)

"Ranger Hawk wrote: Would he really be able to get away with that? It's not likely. :lol: But, I did establish at one point that the soldiers weren't particularly fond ...

Snoik, you're orange now. :lol:

OK, I'll be sure and do that. But, that would be telling and not showing, no? At least, that's what I've been told. Someone told me something like, "She had ...

Ugh, Oo. You didn't edit this post. How do I know if I won't just be restating what has already been said? Will post your review tomorrow. :D

Well, I guess I never mentioned anything about description. I'm good at creating images in my head without requiring much descriptive wording. :wink:

Looks like I'll need to Google that quotation mark thing. :lol: Sometimes I'm too lazy to Google. :P OK, edited according to Lillymoores PM suggestion. :P

I tend to do that. :lol: I'll see to addressing it after school. :wink:

OK, thank you. :P - :smt059