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Re: The Teddy Bear
Thank you, Apple. %uD83E%uDD13
Jan 22, 2025 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 4 snippet)
Hello, Thanks for the read and review. :D Yeah, I was afraid the ejection procedure would still be weird. Hm. Maybe I could have him explain in his mind briefly ...
Dec 15, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 4 Continuation)
Yes, for the population thing I was hoping to make it seem like many more people were born, and that some other people could have died from other causes as ...
Dec 15, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 4 snippet)
Oh my, it scares me how such simple typos avoid my sight. :( Haha. Anyway, hm, I was afraid the driver's hand mechanism would seem odd. I included the inserting ...
Dec 3, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 3)
Yes. Cement path. A dirt path would be overcome by grass and stuff too easily. Thanks for catching the "woman" she's too old to be the girl.
Dec 3, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 3)
I actually just had some mysterious uniformed guys behind the web in my edit. The old lady also became a young girl, slightly older than Chloe. It makes more sense ...
Dec 2, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Intro and Chapter 1)
Oh. Hopefully it will all come together whenever the several of the characters from the dream clash later in the novel. (This too is a segment that I am changing ...
Dec 2, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 3)
Hello, I intended Daniel to be the main character, and Andrew is a sort of antagonist... or is he? I know who he really is, but the reader has to ...
Dec 1, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Chapter 3)
Howdy, Budgie, thanks for your time in reviewing my works. :D Yes, I think I'll perhaps add some descriptions of the characters back in the first chapter. Originally this work ...
Dec 1, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons Chapter 2
I am so sorry for posting this edit! Haha! My computer likes to autosave my files, so I have like three copies of the same work saved on my computer, ...
Nov 21, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Intro and Chapter 1)
You are a genius, Lucia. You're suggestions are fantastic and your catching of my references were spot on. And yes, Andrew is a psycho of sorts. Ordinary student in school, ...
Nov 20, 2014 -
Re: The Last Seasons (Intro and Chapter 1)
@Haven Hello Haven, Thanks for dropping by to read my story. I am sorry for the confusion about ''Mana.'' It is actually a Hebrew word for ''what is it.'' With ...
Nov 15, 2014 -
Re: Silent Rain
Sorry for the way the review came out looking like a big comment. This website has changed so much since I have been here. :P
Oct 21, 2012 -
Re: DISCIPLE
Thanks, y'all. As for the "I" what if before the first one I end the line with "and"? Wow. I am glad I can at least do acrostics, because I ...
Jun 10, 2011 -
Re: Between Nations (Part 1)
Short stories are challenging. In fact, most authors admit to not writing a smany short stories because of that fact. Their shorter lengths make it fairly difficult to establish characterization ...
Jan 16, 2011
