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this looks like more of a brainstorming write-up rather than a finished story. it's good to get down all the details like this in the first draft and cut down ...

i like the mystery through out the story and found myself trying to guess what it was he could be doing on his walks. it wasn't clear that Dorian and ...

very emotional poem. i like it. now for the long detailed review: the change after "THIS IS NOT A GOODBYE" from 2nd person to 1st has a lot of impact, ...

i love the illustration of nothingness. the lack of texture gives off a claustrophobic feeling and the need to break free of the darkness. i also like your word choice ...

i know this isn't a super recent story and you probably aren't working on it anymore, but i thought i'd give a review anyway [ignore it if you want to]. ...