Aravis10

I totally agree with the part about the beginning of the chapter. I broke up one chapter into two, so it has an awkward beginning. Slave language isn't a real ...

It's fine! Thank you!

Woah! I went back and read through really carefully trying to see what you were saying. I use "was" and "felt" a lot! I didn't even notice it before!

I agree about the short sentences. When i was reading through it again today, I noticed that. The relationship between Asenath and Oni is difficult. I've never had a servant ...

I'm back! My life has finally slowed down for a few days. :) Sorry I've been gone for so long.

I know that this chapter is a little short, but I thought that if I put in the next section, it would be too long.

At the beginning it says that it is her 17th birthday. But, from all her experiences, she has matured past her age. Thanks for reviewing!

I know the other chapters were better but I felt that I needed this chapter for later on. Thanks for reviewing! And on't worry. Yoku didn't sound harsh at all.

Thank you! Yes, I am trying to set things up. I didn't want to go over board on this because it isn't a totally major but I'm not sure if ...

I totally understand!

And fix some of it in this one!

Thank you!

Thanks! I will try to do those things in the next chapters!

Thanks! Sometimes I miss those little things.

Shhhhh! Don't give the plot away! ;) i'm kidding. she is a historical character so it is easy to find information on her. Thank for your comments!