Arashi

Right sorry about that lol will take your advice in consideration ahhh just copied it of my notes lol to lazy to edit the spaces lol thanks for the review.

I like the whole atmosphere of it..While I was reading it I could visualize it. Has a nice bit on childhood innocence to it. The point of view is a ...

I think its good but it has the potential to be great! Your poem feels like its unfinished as if the story isn't done. Anyhow you can do it! Good ...

WOW hhahaha havnt been touched by a poem like that in a while...amazing read!