AquaMarine

Hallo, dear! Hey, how come this hasn't received many reviews? It's rather good. :) Ok, so I'm not going to go line by line. Rather, just some impressions. Subject: I ...

Hi, Siona! Ok, so I'll do my best with this. If there has been a part or chapter before this, forgive me. Is part of a short stroy or a ...

Hey there! Here as requested. My family and I had just moved to the United States from Ireland, because Mom had gotten a job as a secretary at the World ...

Hey there! I'm a little too tired for nitpicking, so I'll just give you some thoughts here. Firstly, watch out for clichés in your writing. Calling something the 'Dark Lands' ...

Hey Skins! I felt as though I was having some terrible nightmare ; where my heart would come spilling out of my chest at any moment. None of it seemed ...

Hey Bubblegum! Sorry this is a little late. Okay, the first thing that struck me with this is the way you've narrated it. As Demmie said, the whole thing seems ...

Hey there! Firstly, welcome to YWS. Why not introduce yourself in the Welcome Area? Ok, so onto the review! One of the foremost things I think you need to work ...

Hey Lava! Again, sorry for the terribly late review. But, as you said, school and stuff. :) Firstly, I really admire you for trying out something new. It's something I ...

Hi there! So, I don't think I've reviewed a story of yours before? I seem to remember a poem, though? Anyway, moving on, I really liked this. As people have ...

Hey Sarah! So, although love poems are done very often, it's still possible to make them work. I think you're partway there, but it's by no means perfect. I'd say ...

Hey there! Wow, this is great. I used to totally love this song; I still like it, just not fervently! But it's actually a good piece of music to make ...

Hey Ben! Uh, ok, first off, I really liked this! It's well written and quite funny, so you've done well. Couple of points, though: Dialogue: Firstly, this is very dialogue ...

Hey Ben! Yay, new column! I like the theme for this one, it's a good topic for humour. Now, as Vas said, I hate to be the one giving the ...

Hey Coco! Sorry this is a little late ... Anyway, I like this chapter. It's been some time since I read the story, but this is a nice follow-up with ...

Hey there, Maddy! Sorry this is a little late. Ok, so I still think that some of your dialogue grammar is off. Lydia explained it to you before, so you ...