AquaMarine

Hey Ben! They grow and thrive Upon the ideologies of life’s Naïve and unexplainable existence This stanza seems a little bit hollow - like you're trying to dress it up ...

THIS IS TOTALLY NOT LATE OR ANYTHING. Life: Full of truths, Lies and swindles; Good times and bad. A memory built upon the diet of priceless and countless emotions. Reluctance ...

Hey there! In the first few lines of the poem, I felt like you were being a bit too generous with your words - I'm not going to point out ...

Benji! And so begins my trawl of your poetry ... The hay of a million wordless experiences Presents itself to your fingertips, As you gradually unpick your way. For me, ...

I'm sorry you feel that way - it's a real shame. :) If it helps, I can address some of your points. A lot of members of YWS do simply ...

Hi, Lily! Firstly, as previous people have mentioned, you need to improve your basic spelling in this piece! That's not a big issue, because as always this is a draft ...

You're applying to UWC? That's amazing! I just applied to the British committee myself, although I really doubt I have any chance of getting in. Isn't the whole thing brilliant, ...

Carter? Carter?! Is this the same Carter that I remember, or just a regurgitation of the name? ;) For a prologue, I thought this was good. It was short - ...

Hi, Ish. :D Well, wow. This is brilliant. Your use of the senses is captivating, and you managed to create a truly entertaining poem that's extremely enjoyable, talented and evoking. ...

Hello! I. I liked your opening. There seems to be a very clear sense of detachment within it - which I like because it seems to tie in with your ...

Hello, welcome to YWS. :) I like your reason for writing the song. XD The first thing I noticed here were the ellipses. I'm assuming (apologies if the assumption is ...

Hi, El! Ah, interesting. It's always nice to see what people do with these contest entries, especially when they aren't created to be funny. Anyway, thoughts. One of the first ...

Hello! Grammar: I'm not going to do nitpicks, but in your poem the grammar is quite off-putting and, for me, really detriments the flow and overall feel. As some people ...

Hello, Toe. Here as requested. Firstly, I'll just go through your poem. Unexpected lies glide into our lives, I would really like it if you perhaps explained this line further. ...

Hello! Sorry this is a little later than I intended. she added them to the pot resting on it's hook over the large stone fireplace It's should be 'its'. Her ...