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Its okay, but its a bit sloppy try to put it into paragraphs. There are a few grammar mistakes, and spelling. When they talk on the phone make there lines ...

Okay, no problem

Well I depends, there can be good things about war even know its a bad thing. Like the outcome of it if you win or not. They learn stuff very ...

Oh, that's understandable now. Sorry

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Thank you Any I will keep posting I'm glad you think its getting better I think she is my favorite character to but hey I made her lol.

I corrected some of the things you suggested. I would love to hear if you think its better now or not.

Hey, no problem I'm glad to help, support, you know what i mean. Lol

Thanks for the advice, it makes me happy that you like it. I hoped you would, i noticed that there is a few mistakes after i posted it.

Sorry about the spelling i was in a hurry to type it up.

Sorry its so long! i hope you enjoy it though!

I will take that into consideration.Never hesitate to give me feedback for I find it helpful, not offensive at all. The more open someone is about there thoughts the more ...

Automatically reading this i new it was a poem. It flows nicely and i love how you used thread. It is very attracting, i love it honestly. Its strong and ...

Its very cool, i do suggest to try to put interesting stuff. I do see a few mistakes, its also kind of confusing. Keep up the work

Its very cool, i do suggest to try to put interesting stuff. I do see a few mistakes, its also kind of confusing. Keep up the work