AlyKat

I love to read and have read ever book in my school library....But a REALLY good series is the Bloody Jack series by L.A Meyer it's a long series but ...

Hiyaz =D Im Aly and im gonna review this for you =) Ok color code! Red-Indent (I'll put the first word that should start a new paragraph in red) Blue-Misspell ...

I lovee your first sentence but It bit down hard on its bottom lip, My first thought was, what is it? I absolutley love your description in the first paragraph ...

I've marked in red what needs to be capitalized and put what should be the first sentence of a new paragraph in blue. I'll put any other corrections in green. ...

With a gray hood over my I couldn't see anything, but that was the least of my problems. My hands were feeling soft and wet, almost as if they out ...

DON'T FORGET Hold on, just hold on Just for a little while longer Don't fall, don't you dare fall The stars have no claim on you yet Chorus: Never forget ...

(Well just to start, you have to indent the first sentence in a paragraph) Friday night (,) Paul decided to go out clubbing (Run-on sentence) . He walked up to ...

The small car moved slowly, making tyre (tire) tracks in the snow. Not many people lived around this road. A short middle-aged woman was behind the wheel, her eyes hid ...

Thump, thump, that is the sound Katelyn’s heart made when she made her horse speed up. Katelyn and her sister Holly were running from the Dalen’s. The first sentence sounds ...

I love the story line and considering i say that its good :) I love the description and in the first few paragraphs and if this gets to be a ...

Hey i think this is great!! But to me i think maybe varying the paragraph lengths would really help make this something amazing. I was involved in the story and ...

I love the story line! But i really think that the titled could do with out the depressed part. And non-fiction is about a real this about a real event?!? ...

In it you miss spelled always and scarf..But i really love a story where you can actually get a visual in your head of what it would be like..I really ...