Alteran

I liked it, Nice to see Corries point of view. Helps to tie everything together Not crazy about the dialouge exchange. It was a bit repetitive and kinda of confuseing ...

Holy Hell that was wierd. Good though. Very nicely written though i agree with Myth about the White. I understand though that you are describeing the are but perhaps there ...

You need to italacize the directions for seperation purposes but dont go to heavily into detail about camera angles and stuff. It's one thing if you write and direct this ...

Gah! cliff hanger! I think you can comvine the two chapter easily. I like the first person view too. It keeps me in touch with each character. And the characters ...

That was really good. Depressing like kill myself depressing but ever so good. I liked that you refered to the two men as Macho-man and henchmen. a very nice wy ...

That was great. So blunt and out in the open. Argueing always leads to great makeup....stuff. The one thing i was bothered by was i thought Quinn had just been ...

Hurray! That thing was scary. I liked the way it talked. It seemed very simplictic and matched what it did. And I'm so glad Tea is getting saved. Her shell ...

Adam walked down the clean shining silver halls to the closed sector of the Station. The Highwind was safely docked and it was time for Adam to check in. He ...

Holy Crap! I dont believe it. What a surprise!. Very good. Very few errors. Mostly missing words. Not a big deal. I'm a bit lazy but there real easy to ...

I like it and i dont think it's flimsy. I did wonder if this was the same person from Ch. 1 talking though. I dont think it is. The distaste ...

Oh so sad :( Life sucks for them. I hope she gets away some time. And I'm waiting for Jared to die. Very good and your getting way better at ...

Prologue: An Ill wind. The little boy giggled. He sat amongst the tall, swaying grass and playfully snatched at the lights. Small, glowing balls of colour that floated about, somehow ...

Chapter 6 Tea sighed and slid the letter back in the envelope placing it back in the work desk. She saw the sun had set. Had she really been looking ...

HOLY CRAP! That was totally creepy! That was great. Like wow. The first guy robbing the place and then Ajax robbing the place was very cool. It brought the other ...

I thought he was Dead! I was gonna kill you! Depressing. Is the girl dead? I mean totally dead. I wasn't 100% sure. Your really good and every one of ...