Alice

Aww you made me feel all fuzzily on the writers side ^.^ but chances are this'll never hit the shelves, its only a short story, but it might go in ...

Hey guys! I'm writing the sequel if anybody's interested! It'll be on the first page whenever it shows up!

I doubt there will be a third one (connor hasn't been doing his job of nagging me all that much) but thanks for the advice all!

Wrong, its not JUST you against the world, I'm with you.

I'm extreamly bored right now so i think i'm going to write a second part!!!

I had one of those in my hair today (exceedingly random). Then you should put chapter one at the top, people will mistake it for a short story.

So it wasn't the ending? It sounded like an ending a BAD ending but an ending none-the-less.

Hm... make it a series... that would be cool...Maybe...I'll try to make another one next time I'm bored.

Hm... I'm hooked. Usually I am very good at spotting things that need to be re-worded, but... i can't find anything there! I love it! And there is my opinion.

Ok if this was alive, it would be dead. I edited it THAT much. Is it any better?

Poor deprived people!

I thought I should put what I got on this, I got an A!!!

Ben and Jerry's are the best brand of ice cream there is, i had hoped more people had heard of them. *looks sad*

Wow! If you've expanded it already, do it again. Its too short. It probably wouldn't make a good novel but just make it longer, explain what the things are, more ...

Awww... I suck at poetry but so I'm not even going to attempt to critique it. I'm just going to comment... Awwww.