Alice

...*Disclamer* These are all my opinions I am not an expert so this may sound weird (if thats the case just ignore it) and I haven't read any of the ...

*Disclamer* These are all my opinions I am not an expert so this may sound weird (if thats the case just ignore it) and I haven't read any of the ...

The concept- Very good, but since I haven't read the rest of it I have no clue about what's going on. Grammer- "Take me to Semaphore Park," She said, She ...

T'was very good, except for this one part In a world so cruel, In a world so cold, One girl sits, And cries alone. That part broke beat and rhyming ...

Even though I love Edward and if he were real I would make him make me a vampire I still have to say this... The love between them seems too ...

Hm... interesting. Knowing fully well that its a fanfic I still have to say this, there's no depth, no offense but I didn't care if you made it up the ...

I'm sorry but thats just kind of eeew. It didn't flow too well, it came to a not so good end, and the rhyming and beat wasn't very good. Its ...

Wow... I like it. I'm not sure what you should fix, except for some reason i'm obsessed with ... on the last line MAYBE it would look better with ... ...

I love them both, i think its unfair to compare them. Two different authors, two different plots, two different times, two different genders, many different characters. IF you like lord ...

I love it! I have a weird thing about masks hats and bags. I imagine mine to be big enough to cover half of my face. Which using the metaphore ...

I cannot even begin to convey my love for this book, and I wish I had been the first to read the post, because, well frankly I feel like a ...

Awwwwwwww, i'm not good with giving info on poems, it might have something to do with the fact that any poetry i write is for lack of a better word ...

I didn't bother to read the other comments, because I'm pretty sure I'm going to say the same thing. What Happens Next? you should make it longer! That is not ...

u cut it off too short, if that's the first chapter add some detail, discribe the characters more. i made the mistake of going stright into action with one of ...