Aley

Hey GreenTulip! Aley again. I think this poem is worse than the other one I reviewed in terms of useless things. I took a lot of things out of the ...

Out of everything, I think this poem has a really good sense of place, and my favorite part of a line is "with the scars of the roads cutting between ...

Hi ZLYF, Aley here on Review day for a Poetry Exchange. I am going to point out a few things about the villanelle structure which I think you followed even ...

I found this poem a bit hard to get into. For me the strongest stanza is the last one and the others are a bit jumbled. Overall the idea is ...

While I can see exactly what you were trying to do, with the idea of "roots up of wild onions" that imagery is kind of hard to follow for me. ...

Hello Take That you Fiend! This is our first time meeting in this format I think, so I'll do this the long way. I really like that you kept this ...

Grammar: I remember that same day. When the fists were tight, And the eyes were cold. "I remember that same day , when the fists were tight and the eyes ...

Hi Magpie! Me again with the poetry exchange. my canvas shoes on dirty sidewalk slap rap into pickup trucks This to me is a super important point in the poem, ...

Hi, Aley here with the FebPoeEx I'm gong to start with picking out lines and telling you things I think, then move into a review. she is a corrosive nomad ...

Hi, I'm Aley I'll be writing this review as I read so please forgive me if I seem a little misinformed. I'll probably go back and edit that stuff out, ...

I think for a poem coming from such a personal space, you didn't really venture into the realm of depth that I expected. Being from this culture, where we have ...

So I'd like to show you something I do with a lot of new poets, or exploring poets, or myself when I'm really stuck on something. Basically what I'm going ...

I really appreciate that you worked within the boundaries of an Italian Sonnet, using the abbaabba cdecde format, however most sonnets are not actually two stanzas, but the change in ...

Hey Resistance, What you're attempting is admirable, the subject matter is a very concrete one, and you use metaphors that are very clear, all revolving around falling. You stick with ...

Hello AE, here to check you out. So when I first read this poem I was not aware you were actually trying to make a riddle. I just thought you ...