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Re: This Is Us
WOW. That was amazing. I couldn't understand it, and that is what made it great. There was such feeling that everything that I couldn't understand had a meaning and everything ...
Jul 15, 2008 -
Re: A Flower of Hope: Chapter 1 (fix)
I liked it, but I don't really think it makes sense...If some strange guy walked by my house and said he didn't remember his name I wouldn't exactly say, "Hey ...
Jul 15, 2008 -
Re: A small whimper, but no more
Very good, I have just one problem. She says, "Her big brown eyes would stop me right on the spot." Well thinking of them would too, right? If she didn't ...
Jul 15, 2008 -
Re: Flashback to Pain; Chapter 1
Creepy, but too creepy for the begining. I know she is going to go to the party, its obvious. Thats the problem, if somebody said that to me I'd be ...
Jul 15, 2008 -
Re: Life of Grubb
Good job! It was very descriptive. I just wanted to say that you do get kinda confused with the dog knowing about humans, and then being seemingly confused about what ...
Jun 28, 2008 -
Re: Ocean Song
I liked it, its a bit choppy, but very cool. It was different, and kind of creepy. Just watch out for punctuation. I have to mention this, but I was ...
Jun 24, 2008 -
Re: The story of the unnamed full
I liked this. It wasn't really a story, story, it was more of how someone might explain themself. I kinda write like that when I write in my journal. The ...
Jun 24, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 7
This chapter was ok. I have to say it was a bit......Noninformational. I don't know, but somehow this chapter wasn't as interesting as the others. I'm not quite sure why, ...
Jun 24, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 6
YAY YAY YAY! MORE ISAAC!!!! Sorry, but I really do like him! The only problem I have with this chapter is Carmen pushing her towards Isaac. I can definately say ...
Jun 24, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 5
ISAAAC!!! YAY! So, I loved that chapter. The words bonder and bondee are a bit weird, but other that that I absolutely, completely loved it. I like how she is ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 4
YAY! CARMEN IS GONE! (I don't know why, but I can't stand him, I think it was because of when he was mean to her in the begining.) Anyway, I ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 3
RAWR!!! WHERE IS ISAAC!!!! I WANT TO HEAR ABOUT HIM, NOT STUPID CARMEN!!! (sorry I already like him and I want him back) Now that I'm done with my little ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 2
I liked this chapter too, but I felt like there wasn't enough. She talks to Philip, Rebecca gets angry, and then she leaves, talks to her friend, then dreams, and ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: Poisoned Roses--Chapter 1
I liked it a lot, but I thought the begining of school thing was a lot like Twilight too. It was good though. Just be careful not to use "but" ...
Jun 17, 2008 -
Re: Things Unsaid
I liked the last stanza too, it actually took me by suprise. I thought that the person was angry. Like, "you just listen to rumors, and don't even bother to ...
Jun 17, 2008
