Ocean Song

by Rjjr_vectra

Published June 24, 2008

Fell into the ocean, into the dark I see
black-hearted angels swim with me
taking me deeper into my bottomless sea

all my past and futures were with me
all the things I used to see
my angels that swim with me

fish sway and circle
as the light fades quietly
there was nothing to eat but me

here they deliver me
half-eaten and sleeping
my angels fly away, slowly

there is nothing to remember
nothing to forget
now there's no one with me
now I feel empty and free.

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Wrote it while listening to "Pyramid Song" by Radiohead. Sounds really depressing, but so did the song :|

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Alarainya
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Alarainya wrote a review Review · Jun 24, 2008

I liked it, its a bit choppy, but very cool. It was different, and kind of creepy. Just watch out for punctuation.

I have to mention this, but I was just about to post a poem I wrote. Guess what the name is? "Ocean Song" I'm sorry, but I thought that was really funny.

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Firestar
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Firestar commented Comment · Jun 24, 2008

I found it very rough and bumpy. Also there's some punctuation missing.



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