Alainna

Thank you for the comments and help! I think for this piece of writing (the story as a whole) it is my sentence structure that lets me down a little ...

Yeah, this is fact based, in fact the part where Michael grabs a child and runs is based on what my father did during the invasion. This is a good ...

Thanks Order! Generally my commas etc are there for effect, it's just the way I 'talk' to the reader. But I shall consider what you have said. By the way ...

I've read Murder On The Orient Express and the Hollow, which are both brilliant. I don't like Miss Marple though, I prefer Poirot. The Hollow is great, I would recommend ...

Thank you for all the comments. Twit- It was from Claire and I'm glad you picked up on that!!! DQ- It was only called letter to you because a lot ...

Thanks for pointing that out ShadowTwit! You're not being nosy, no worries!! Yes, I do have a scar from being burnt last October. It's on my upper arm on my ...

I loved this part JC. It was very sad and your writing flowed well. All I can say is that if I were Jamie I'd get the hell outta that ...

Now it's my turn to blush! I don't think my quality of writing is as good as JC's!!!! I LOVE POD!!!! However, I've always used flash backs, I think they're ...

Thanks guys for the comments. I'm in complete agreement that the argument was rubbish and this chapter not to strong. I really need to work on it! Jules- I'm here, ...

OK, so I actually read all of it and kinda saw the ending happen, but it was still sad. I must of cried at least six times through this book ...

Thank you so much for all your crits! When editing I shall improve this argument, draw it out, etc. I completely agree with the comments made about that! Lyla's mum ...

Re-write!!! Woop!! This is a little more...inspiring. It didn't make me loose all hope on Jamie. I could actually see yourself in Natalie, the writer acting as the friend to ...

Coincidence. I read the first chapter of this book yesterday as my mate is reading it and already I'm absorbed. I'm off to buy it soon... Characters flat??? No way... ...

Thanks for all the crits! I knew I had spelt that wrong, but it came up fine on my Word spelling checker..... JC- Lyla is 16. That's why it wasn't ...

Everyone has been telling me to read this book, but I never got round to it. Well, now I'm adding it to my summer reading list and I'll comment on ...