Alainna

Hey JC! The new book? Excellent. The first four paragraphs were great. I really loved the description of the field etc, nice to draw the reader in. It was always ...

Yay for chapter six!! Very good as usual Rosie - just a few little things. She was much better off then she was three years ago, married for a year ...

Hi there Daytripper. First off, be careful to keep your two-one crit ratio. :wink: OK, as for the crit: Brad Kesol was my other best friend, and also known as ...

Hiya. First of all, I suggest that you break up this post as it is very long and hard to digest in one sitting. Try posting it in chapters or ...

Ok, if you want something YA then I have a whole list of Authors: Sue Mayfield Stephanie Meyer Gabrielle Zevin Meg Rosoff Melvin Burgess Berlie Doherty Kevin Brooks Julia Green ...

Hey Seraphium, sorry it's taken me so long......school and Easter and critiquing don't mix. OK, here we go: They’re creators respecting their whishes created a world very similar to ours ...

I'm probably just going to end up echoing what everyone else have said. Your writing is good and I like your style, but you lack a constant pace and your ...

I did like this piece and I think that the rhyme scheme worked well up until- Everything I did, I tried to do for you, but my one achievement, Among ...

I quite liked this. It captured the emotions very well. …I think I need you Perhaps change to 'I think I'm gonna need you too.' It flows better and completes ...

I liked this poem, although the subject has been done many times before. I think it could do with being a bit longer, as it is now it is too ...

At the moment this is a bit of a free - for - all. Without any structure this piece looks like a paragraph of navel - gazing. - Try to ...

I enjoyed this despite not reading the introduction. I think you're writing shows a lot of potential and I would be happy to read more. Something was happening, I didn’t ...

Aspergers is a form of Autism. :D I really liked this book as well. I think the way it was written was such an insight into how an autistic mind ...

This isn't a poem. It contains no structure, very little grammar and probably belongs in a blog rather than on here. Please remember to use: Capital letters. Correct spelling of ...

I really liked this. I enjoyed your style, with your varying sentences and repetition. It was a bit short; which was disappointing and makes it hard to critique. There weren't ...