Aisha

Its really good. I was totally hooked, like someone else already mentioned. And the way you've presented it is excellent. I'm sooo looking forward to reading more of this novel.:)

Well, the story idea was nice enough, but there are problems with the over all presentation. And the tenses are especially confusing. But on the whole, it is a good ...

Wow! I love it!:) Its beutiful. I know I'm just repeating what a bunch of other people already said, but I especially like the imagery in your poem. And how ...

Its a good one. You write description really well. So you created a good picture with your story. Like someone else mentioned, it would be better if you used a ...