Aina

Hi iCarlyfan, In general I like your piece. It is somehow nice and peaceful. What disturbs me are the references to Bella's strength. As far as I can remember (I ...

Hi GryphonFledgling, I just finished reading all five episodes in one go. I have no experience in critiquing scripts so I am going say something about the plot and characters ...

Okay writers pen, Here comes your very long review. Just so this is clear before you read this: I think your idea is good! It is your writing that needs ...

I agree with fhwdf that your story really does have a funny moral. There are a few points that disturbed me though: 1. Silver-Light is a really odd name if ...

Thanks for the PM. Feel free to keep sending them. Here are the thing I noticed: I had to go back to part 3 to check and then I saw ...

Thank you for the PM. There is not really much I can criticize here. You did a very good job. I agree with bludragon that the ages are kind of ...

I did not think that this was very funny. 2 reasons: 1) Too much cussing. A overload of cussing is not funny. It is only not very creative. Unless you ...

Thank you for the PM. Here we go: Each time one of those deadly legs cut my body, I would be reminded of the reason I’d been shot – the ...

Okay. Here we go. First: I have got absolutely no idea about what this place is, what the Poet is like and what is going on after having read the ...

Wow. I really like the way it is obvious that she is dreaming although you do not say it until the very end. Everything is so obviously nightmare scenario. It ...

Okay. I do not want to repeat what everyone else said. You have got a lot of good material to get started. All three parts have brilliant beginnings and endings. ...

One word: WOW! I really love the atmosphere you created. I can't wait to hear more. Could you PM me when you have got the next part up? What sort ...

I liked what you wrote. You worked out the mood very well. I do not know what you do not like about your CW or what you want to change. ...