Adnamarine

This was fantastic. Absolutely amazing. It was deep, but coherent. There was nothing ordinary, nothing cliche or trite about this piece. It was stunning. The only thing I have to ...

Hi Kat! First of all, it should be "lies" not "lays", in the title, and the other two times you use the word. Its steel made greater with rust, proving ...

Hi Shina! Okay first. Too many questions. True, they're mostly rhetorical questions, they don't leave the reader questioning, but that almost makes them all the more unnecessary. You could as ...

Because a flame is more than heat, And wax is more than oil. Keeping alive is quite the feat, When surrounded by tur-moil. What because? What is the result of ...

"A bridge of colors hangs motionless in the sky." 'bridge of colors' isn't the most unique description of a rainbow. I'd go for something more subtle, even if it's just ...

This is a great beginning. I don’t have any plot or character faults to mention. I think the biggest problem is your tendency to make your prose very wordy, and ...

The first stanza of this poem was lovely. I have to admit, I'm afraid, that the rest of the poem became gradually more and more of a let down after ...

To start with, I do like the story in this poem, the meaning; it's unique, and true to life. But let's take a look at your means of expressing it; ...

I've always wanted to try pantoum. Even though changing some of the wording in the repeated lines doesn't technically follow the rules, poetry rules are made to be broken, right? ...

Forgive the delay! I forgot I suggested my WRFF thread and was only looking out for a PM. :P And now forgive me if I can only point out some ...

The desert lay calm, chilling under the moons angelic glow. “moon’s” Calm resonated around the grassy plain semi-colon, period, or dash Then the sky went dark. Animals around tensed, in ...

Here as requested Cogz! =D Since this is your first poem, I’m going to try to be especially thorough, but that doesn’t mean I’m picking on you. :P I’m glad ...

Hi Edward =) I see you're new to the site, so welcome. We do have a rule here, however, where we ask that you do two reviews before you post ...

First of all, please edit your poems before posting them. A single typo ("hrelp") is one thing, but you neglect to capitalize your 'i's four times. There were two sentences, ...

Hi Kamas! The burning sensation that scorched my insides with a wildfire The icy cold clarity of what my heart unfolded to my mind. First of all, this isn’t a ...