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Re: Be My Anti-Valentine
It was definately a sound piece of work, and I can't really find any real faults with it, it just didn't dazzle me, I don't know why. One thing though: ...
Feb 13, 2008 -
Re: Just Pretend I Didn't Tear Your World Apart
Oh, gosh, I loved this so much:) However... (ah yes, that inevitable word...) when my head used to make sense. I hope you've forgotten me easily. I have trouble turning ...
Feb 11, 2008 -
Re: 365
Absolutely excellent. I don't really have any real advice of my own, I just thought I'd pass on some that I've been given, that italicizing things is something that you ...
Feb 11, 2008 -
Re: Like Fine Grains of Sand
It's good, I just don't get the references to sand... May I wish to hold it all the time. Do you wish that you hold it all the time? Or ...
Feb 11, 2008 -
Re: Waiting
Hey weather - I really liked this, but I think that the last stanza detracted from the rest of the poem. It didn't fit and it wasn't as powerful. It ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Unnamed
I really like this, but just a few things. If you ask me for my name, I will tell you I have none. This line just seems to long. You ...
Feb 9, 2008 -
Re: Serendipity
I had a great rythm and flow, it kind of had a swaying feel to it. But apart from that... I don't want to go so far as to say ...
Jan 26, 2008 -
Re: Whose footsteps?
I really liked this, and you should definately keep working on it. It would help if you made it longer, to add more to the thoughts you have here, and ...
Jan 26, 2008 -
Re: The Dead Poets Society
I really like the first verse. Except I might take out the zombie reference, it doesn't really seem to match. Also, I agree with Seraph, I'd take out moonlight. To ...
Jan 25, 2008 -
Re: Silent Whimper
Maybe it's just that I don't really like modern poetry, but I didn't really get this. And I didn't really get anything from it. Of course, it doesn’t particularly strike ...
Jan 24, 2008 -
Re: One End of a Pencil
Loved it, Incan, and that's saying a lot considering I'm not generally fond of most poetry. I don't know a lot about poetry, but I wouldn't connect those two stanzas. ...
Feb 13, 2007 -
Re: God talked to me today
It was very good. It made me sad and obviously a lot of other people too, and that's good. It means you're getting a reaction from people, you're making them ...
Jan 22, 2007 -
Re: My Eyes Decieve Me
Is it that I'm blind? Blind to the world that surrounds me? What makes me so special? Why see what no one else sees? Or is it that you are ...
Jan 22, 2007