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*shivers involuntarily* Whew. That was creepy, obviously. Kind of a love/hate relationship I'm having with your little work of horror. Makes me feel kind of mellow. Now I have to ...

What you need first is an outline, which will allow you to clear up your points and your entire essay. What I'm seeing is this: Introduction, comparison and contrast of ...

I'm going to address two general categories. First, grammar, punctuation, etc., then content. About the title, I know Ofour corrected your spelling, but is it meant to accent that it ...

Neat essay. I can't really comment on content, since I know nothing about the topic, but there were some wordy spots. First, when dividing a paper with no paragraphs into ...

The punctuation thing definitely needs to be fixed. You said that you knew there were errors. There are LOTS of places where punctuation is needed, commas especially. If you fix ...

The Odyssey was first created sometime between 800 and 600 B.C. as an epic poem that was sung by trained bards in a style called dactylic hexameter, which gave the ...

Then after I was tired of the crooner’s, I chilled out to some Matisyahu. Beastie Boys. Bob Dylan. Herbie Hancock. Should be: "Matisyahu, Beastie Boys, Bob Dylan, and Herbie Hancock." ...

I read it about a year ago for a sixth grade project. I absolutely loved it. I wrote my book report and discussed the political aspects of the book. When ...

Neat piece! It reminds me of that "Dear America" series. Even though this is for school, I'm sure you could do some more with it. You could expand the entries, ...

Good job... I can hear you speaking this as I read it. It is rather odd. But anyway, you have some excellent points. I know I am but a mere ...

As it was said, this is short. I hope you expand it soon. It seems rather choppy in places, and you need more sentence variation. You started several sentences with ...

Here are my comments: He was smiling widely at Searria and I, at Mom, and she smiled too. Maybe you should omit the "at mom" here; it seems a little ...

Great job! I really enjoyed reading this. You make a lot of good points and used great examples from current events. I think this was an awesome English paper. I ...

idk...i was bored so i decided to post an essay i wrote a year ago This introduction makes your piece seem kind of common. This is because you sound like ...

This is a short composition, which I wrote when I was asked by my teacher to begin a composition with “There was darkness all around. I walked ahead two steps ...