Abocreature

Thank you very much, Xyra. You were quite helpful! I revised it a bit, and I hope it answers all of your questions. :)

Thanks anyway. I'll go fix the mistakes I made. I'll do my best to make chapter 2 a lot more interesting.

Thanks a lot! I'll go through and fix it. I promise it will get better later on, this was just to provide some background info.

This has gotten me very interested. ^^ A few sentences you may want to rewrite, but overall, great job! The other people took all the mistakes I would point out, ...

Ok then, I will continue! And thanks for the support, I'm really glad someone likes this! ;) Oh, and I tried axe, but for some reason it isn't in my ...

Thanks a bunch, ashleylee, that actually helped a lot. ^^ Ok, so I edited to story according to the reviews an critiques I got, I hope it's better. ^^

Thank you, summergrl. That sure gives me confidence ^^.

Thank you all for the critiques, I'll go through and see what I can fix. ^^

Thank you, these are the kind of reviews I enjoy because it helps me improve. I'll try to work on my neutral voice and dialogue thing. ^^

Thank you, that really means a lot to me. ^^

Ok, so I've almost completely changed it. I hope you all enjoy the edited version! ^^

Thanks. I'll go through and fix it up.

I like this poem a lot! The ending made me laugh. Too bad I don't know what that would feel like... Anyway, this was a great poem. I think it ...

Nice! I like the name change. ^^ Better than anything I could have come up with. ^^

I'm not sure if I'm going to finish this story. It's because out of the 145 people who read it, only 1 person actually said it was good. I'm really ...