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I like how you ended this. Although the line about boys having ripped muscles sounds off. It adds to the overall picture. On a light note people who think scars ...

Absolutely wonderful. Great imagery and depiction of sunset. There is just something comforting and relaxing about watching a sunset. My favourate line is 'Nestled in folds of ivory cream.' While ...

The poem flows well and they took me right into the poem. I don't really have anyone so antagonized towards me as this poem's narrator (because I get angry real ...

Very Deep! :o But to be a poem it misses something. Like every one said, you should make it flow. :D Good Luck Ayman~

so they are tourists hmmm.....I think if I would have written it I would simply have mentioned it but all of us have different views The last stanza's are emotionally ...

Excellent word painting. I loved the line Young spirits shy from the marrows of wood, pressing their footprints into battle dust Amazing :!: As I read this I am there!!!! ...

Hello; Nice poem :!: I read it through gathering the little thougths and then re-read it gleaning some of the deeper meaning. Hope you success in your future writing ~ayman~ ...

This was a wonderful poem! :smt026 Great rhyme. Wonderful meaning. There are some tences in past and some in present, but it actually adds to the poem I think. :roll: ...

Loss is difficult, no one said it would be easy. fading of mind and body, can have severe consequences. I think if you remove CAN from the last verse will ...