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Hey, Ninja! I'm back again. I noticed you haven't received any other critiques other than mine. I'm thinking you ought to change the title. "Depression" has little feeling and it's ...

Ah! New title!! *hyperventilates and grabs a paper bag* The new title is awesome, and it works. Plus, I like the Latin phrase in your sig, it's great! Keep it ...

Hey, Nick! I just came back to look at this again, because I really like it. And I read the two comments underneath my first one, and I have to ...

“Sorry for being so late, but this is my first day[s], and[/s] . M y schedule is awfully confusing,” he murmured softly in a thick Scottish accent. " And yes, ...

Sorry! I just found this part. I think if you put it with the other half, it wouldn't be too long. Anyway, here it goes: We stand facing each other, ...

The elderly Victorian-style home rested just off of the gravel driveway, its wrap-around porch sagging under the weight of years of wear and tear on the meager building. I bolded ...

Yay! This is great. Now you are ready to move on, and I congratulate you for taking my criticism and suggestions so well. Most people just ignore them. (probably because ...

Wow! Your editing did a lot! This was a big improvement! Angel's and mine reviews certainly helped. I think you've done a great job revamping this. *drum roll* But, now ...

Really short. Doesn't mean it's bad (it isn't) but you can add so much more. :)

:shock: Intimidating paragraphs. Could hardly get through the first few. That's all I have to say.

Also, I accidentally clicked the wrong bubble on your poll. I meant to put that I wasn't really confused, but I got confused in the process and hit the wrong ...

My darling, my dearest, This is you. That last two lines did the trick. There were a few capitalization errors, but other than that, I thought it was good.

I think this was good, very riveting. But i think you should add on to it, make it more of a story than just a scene. More of this would ...

This was really good. It was sad. It was also short, but you gave enough information to give us an idea about the girl's personality and suffering. I thought this ...

Thanks for that! Anna is a vampire. She was turned against her will by a man she thought she loved, whose name was Simon Rambaldi. Her mother was taken from ...