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Lady Amelia slightly turned her head to the left as she raised her hand to her companion's forearm. “Emma, dear , a re you quite all right?” [s]Except[/s] Emma didn't ...

Hey, Icefire! I hope I can help with this. :) By the way, what's with the title? "Together Fornever?" Is it supposed to be "Together Forever" or "Together For Never"? ...

Ahhhh . . . Joseph's already done the nitpicking, so I'll just say that this is great. I know writers hate to hear that (I do anyway) but this really ...

Hey, welcome to YWS. This is really good for one of your first pieces, if I might say. Jusst to be clear bold is a correction, italics is something I ...

Hey, Nic! I'm so excited for this; I'm glad you added those two weeks, and I think this'll turn out great. Now on to the review. My feet crushed leaves ...

Her eyes are like the ocean That she stares into endlessly Didn't get this. She stares into her own eyes? I'm not sure how that's supposed to work. Rewrite: Her ...

Hey, yukisgirl. I hope this helps. We had just got home from the party and Logan was spending a couple of days here. I immediately [s]go[/s] went to my room ...

During the [s]W[/s] w inter of the year 1806, the temperature for the season was frigid and the lakes were frozen solid. Good beginning, though I think you might be ...

Hi, BrokenVain! I'll do my best on this. And don't worry. We don't eat people alive here; we're not canibals. (jk) :lol: I laid my head against the cold desk’s ...

I think everything Ashley pointed out is what I would have too. There weren't many grammatical errors or typos, and I'm not very concerned with the British spelling; that can ...

Hey, ashley! I can't give a really in-depth review right now, I need to do my own nightly writing, but I might come back later and give you one. I ...

He lay on his stomach in the hammock that hung between the two palm trees in his front yard. I climb in, sitting on top of him and wrapping my ...

Lorena w oke the next morning n ice and early. The d rapes had already been drawn back and the sun ' s gentle rays hit her face giving her ...

Hey, Niccy! Can't wait to read this. Give me a moment, and I'll give you a fantastic review . . . Before reading: I am very prepared for any stuff ...

Hey, Ashley! I can't really spend time on a review right now, but I'll be back to check this out! :D I am soooo excited for this! ~Sunny Oh, yeah ...