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This is really well written. I'd like to see more emotion in the piece, as most of the poem describes that scenario, rather than the author's opinion of it. I ...

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This is really well written. I'd like to see more emotion in the piece, as most of the poem describes that scenario, rather than the author's opinion of it. I ...

Interesting ending. Great foreshadowing, although the ending seemed predictable to me. I would recommend adding some kind of twist to add more suspense, for example, the gun wasn't right where ...

I really like these. In the second one, replace my with me in the last line, but other than that great work. I'd love to see these extended into longer ...

I really like these. In the second one, replace my with me in the last line, but other than that great work. I'd love to see these extended into longer ...

I really like these. In the second one, replace my with me in the last line, but other than that great work. I'd love to see these extended into longer ...

This gave me chills. I love the way you convey the author's emotions, especially the line "Everything works like clockwork, perfect pieces moving precisely. Then there is me. The first ...

This gave me chills. I love the way you convey the author's emotions, especially the line "Everything works like clockwork, perfect pieces moving precisely. Then there is me." The first ...

Thank you so much!

Thank you for the tips, I'll keep them in mind!

Amazing story, just make sure that you’re writing is in the same tense. Overall, a great start, looking forward to reading more!!!

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Amazing story, just make sure that you’re writing is in the same tense. Overall, a great start, looking forward to reading more!!!