Telling instead of showing is one of the most common things I see wrong in stories. But what does showing and telling mean?
Telling - Should not be used in many cases. Telling is like forgetting your teddy bear at home on show and tell day and describing him to the class instead. Adverbs are commonly placed under the 'Telling' category and that is why they should be used sparingly and only when necessary.
Examples: She was furious. The teddy bear was fuzzy. I walked slowly.
There are times when telling should be used, such as a point in the story when you want to skim over a time and just offer a summary of what happened.
Showing - Should be used most of the time. Showing is like bringing your teddy bear to school the next week and showing everyone what you meant.
Examples: She glared at him, fists clenched, like she wished she could shoot flames from her eyeballs. The teddy bear was covered in a layer of soft, fuzzy velvet. I dragged my feet in the sand as I walked, in no hurry to be home.
See how much more interesting those sentences are then the previous ones? They say so much more and they show the reader what you mean, instead of just straight-out telling them.
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