A Heart that Hides

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snowberry23
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Wed May 04, 2011 9:54 pm
snowberry23 says... · Wed May 04, 2011 9:54 pm
I loved this!
The way you word things it very eclectic and i honestly love this...i read it about four times before realizing i should post to say how much i love it.
I am looking forward to reading more of your work.
Also, let me just say, i dont think you should change anything, leave it just the way it is :)
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Thu May 05, 2011 1:01 am
Fortissimo says... · Thu May 05, 2011 1:01 am
Hi, I'm Forti(:
I have to say that this is the first poem (in a long time), that I've seen that has good spelling, punctuation and grammar. I can't see anything substantial that needs to be changed. The flow is nice, the feel sets a nice mood. Your words painted a picture for me and made a clear image of what you are trying to say!
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Why should Caesar just get to stomp around like a giant while the rest of us try not to get smushed under his big feet? Brutus is just as cute as Caesar, right? Brutus is just as smart as Caesar, people totally like Brutus just as much as they like Caesar, and when did it become okay for one person to be the boss of everybody because that's not what Rome is about! We should totally just stab Caesar!
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