A Heart that Hides

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snowberry23
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Wed May 04, 2011 9:54 pm
snowberry23 says... · Wed May 04, 2011 9:54 pm
I loved this!
The way you word things it very eclectic and i honestly love this...i read it about four times before realizing i should post to say how much i love it.
I am looking forward to reading more of your work.
Also, let me just say, i dont think you should change anything, leave it just the way it is :)
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Thu May 05, 2011 1:01 am
Fortissimo says... · Thu May 05, 2011 1:01 am
Hi, I'm Forti(:
I have to say that this is the first poem (in a long time), that I've seen that has good spelling, punctuation and grammar. I can't see anything substantial that needs to be changed. The flow is nice, the feel sets a nice mood. Your words painted a picture for me and made a clear image of what you are trying to say!
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Very well; I hear; I admit, but I have a voice too, and for good or evil mine is the speech that cannot be silenced.
— Joseph Conrad, Heart of Darkness