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This poem is a little bit confusing.

Love is hard
Hard like a stone
A stone easy to hold
To Hold but hard to brake.

Right here you say that love and the heart are hard to break. Which originally I had no problem with.
But, in the very next stanza you completely contradict that.

Love is Unfair
Unfair for the weak heart
The heart left broken
Broken like a mirror.

Here you say how love is unfair to the heart and breaks it. I don't know which one you really agree with. This would be very good if you could just clarify your meaning a little more.

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I did not connect with this poem, but it is not bad. A few changes need to be made though:

slandie wrote:Love is hard,
Hard like a stone,
A stone easy to hold ,
To Hold but hard to brake.
-Use commas, please!
Love is Unfair,
Unfair for the weak heart,
The heart left broken,
Broken like a mirror.
-Comma alert!
Love is dangerous,
Dangerous like a fire,
A Fire that burns the heart,
A heart in ashes .

But after all, It's worth it,-But after all (,) comma. Its worth it.
It's worth it because it can be the most wondorful time of our lives,(wonderful?)
A time of our lives full of joy and pure happiness,
A pure happiness that keeps our heart young forever.

Commas aren't a necessity but they sometimes help in a poem or in anything. Good luck, keep writing!

I like this, It is a nice poem and it reminds me of how my little sister writes...

Love is hard
Hard like a stone
A stone easy to hold
To Hold but hard to brake. #FF0000 ">Here I think that you could take out "To hold" and the effect and meaning will still be the same, but also, I don't see how this makes sence. Love is VERY easy to brake...

I like that you compared love to something people don't always refer to love as...

But after all It's worth it
It's wo#FF0000 ">rth it because it can be the most wond#FF0000 ">erful time of our lives #FF0000 ">I don't know, this line here just seems to throw off the rhythm, it is a bit long...
A time of our lives full of joy and pure happiness
A pure happiness that keeps our heart young forever.

Also, I think that you referring to love as hard like a stone is good, but you only refer to it as a stone in that first stanza, then you go on to say that love is Unfair, but you don't say that it is unfair because it is hard like a stone and can cause a heart to break, if you did that, I think the poem would be a lot better and more solid.

Over all, I like this poem, it has great potential.

I hope this help!!

~Rain~