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This poem is a little bit confusing.

Love is hard
Hard like a stone
A stone easy to hold
To Hold but hard to brake.

Right here you say that love and the heart are hard to break. Which originally I had no problem with.
But, in the very next stanza you completely contradict that.

Love is Unfair
Unfair for the weak heart
The heart left broken
Broken like a mirror.

Here you say how love is unfair to the heart and breaks it. I don't know which one you really agree with. This would be very good if you could just clarify your meaning a little more.

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I did not connect with this poem, but it is not bad. A few changes need to be made though:

slandie wrote:Love is hard,
Hard like a stone,
A stone easy to hold ,
To Hold but hard to brake.
-Use commas, please!
Love is Unfair,
Unfair for the weak heart,
The heart left broken,
Broken like a mirror.
-Comma alert!
Love is dangerous,
Dangerous like a fire,
A Fire that burns the heart,
A heart in ashes .

But after all, It's worth it,-But after all (,) comma. Its worth it.
It's worth it because it can be the most wondorful time of our lives,(wonderful?)
A time of our lives full of joy and pure happiness,
A pure happiness that keeps our heart young forever.

Commas aren't a necessity but they sometimes help in a poem or in anything. Good luck, keep writing!

I like this, It is a nice poem and it reminds me of how my little sister writes...

Love is hard
Hard like a stone
A stone easy to hold
To Hold but hard to brake. Here I think that you could take out "To hold" and the effect and meaning will still be the same, but also, I don't see how this makes sence. Love is VERY easy to brake...

I like that you compared love to something people don't always refer to love as...

But after all It's worth it
It's worth it because it can be the most wonderful time of our lives I don't know, this line here just seems to throw off the rhythm, it is a bit long...
A time of our lives full of joy and pure happiness
A pure happiness that keeps our heart young forever.

Also, I think that you referring to love as hard like a stone is good, but you only refer to it as a stone in that first stanza, then you go on to say that love is Unfair, but you don't say that it is unfair because it is hard like a stone and can cause a heart to break, if you did that, I think the poem would be a lot better and more solid.

Over all, I like this poem, it has great potential.

I hope this help!!

~Rain~