Hello!
Firstly, I want to make it clear that I don't know much about poetry. I'll try to do my best, though, and I hope it's helpful.
Quote:
Why my eyes you always fool?
Because it's a question, the word "do" needs to be there somewhere... maybe: "Why my eyes do you always fool?"
Quote:
When anas sucked the life from me
I think this should be "ana's" because you're saying "ana has," aren't you? That brings me to my next point:
Who is ana, and why isn't her name capitalized? Is she supposed to represent anorexia? I don't really understand. It may just be me being dumb, but I think you should clarify her.
Other than than, interesting poem for sure! The rhyme works well and the rhythm is consistent and easy to read.
Hope this helps somewhat.
